练习
Nowadays, traveling alone has become an increasingly popular way of traveling, while group traveling is still a common choice for many people. In my opinion, traveling alone is a better choice, and its advantages are more obvious than those of group traveling.
group traveling → 应改为 group tour
First of all, traveling alone is extremely convenient for office workers. For example, they can travel right now according their free time that don’t wait othes people, which saves a lot of precious time, especially for busy office workers.
othes people → 应改为 other people
according their free time that don’t wait othes people → 应改为 according to their free time without waiting for other people; (that don’t 主谓不一致)
Besides, traveling alone is more economical, For instance, some place of tour may provide more cheaper price in the special time. What is more, we can compare with price in the other websites, which helps us make better choice.
more cheaper price → 应改为 cheaper prices（比较级错误）
compare with price → 应改为 compare prices
in the special time → 应改为 during special periods
some place of tour → 应改为 some tourist attractions 或 some tour sites
Finally, traveling alone offers great personalize experience. We can also make customized travel plan through some websites, which has more others travel routine and experience.
great personalize experience → 应改为 a great personalized experience
which has more others travel routine and experience → 应改为 which provides more travel routine options and experiences
Although group traveling allows people to make friends and have guided services, this small advantage cannot match the benefits of traveling alone. In conclusion, traveling alone is more convenient, economical, and personalize experience. For these reasons, I definitely support traveling alone as a superior choice for most people.
and personalize experience → 应改为 and personalize
优化后
Nowadays, traveling alone has become an increasingly popular way of traveling, while group tours are still a common choice for many people. In my opinion, traveling alone is a better choice, and its advantages are more obvious than those of group tours.
First of all, traveling alone is extremely convenient for office workers. For example, they can travel right away according to their free time without waiting for other people, which saves a lot of precious time, especially for busy office workers.
Besides, traveling alone is more economical. For instance, some tourist attractions may provide cheaper prices during special periods. What is more, we can compare prices on different websites, which helps us make better choices.
Finally, traveling alone offers a great personalized experience. We can also make customized travel plans through some websites, which provide more travel routine options and experiences.
Although group tours allow people to make friends and have guided services, this small advantage cannot match the benefits of traveling alone. In conclusion, traveling alone is more convenient, economical, and personalized. For these reasons, I definitely support traveling alone as a superior choice for most people.